On Ben's posts, I wrote:
Well, here I am in lab 237 smirking like an idiot. This story takes some pretty heavy first and last quotes and spins them into something completely original. I kind of sensed a Madagascar vibe when I started this but I thought it was clever how you actually mentioned the characters in that movie. "They were hiding out because they didn’t want to make another movie." This line almost made me laugh out loud, and trust me, you don't want to hear my cackle.
Great job!Laura
Okay, so this is a reoccurring character. Nice. I like how the story ends on a mysterious note. I have never been enthralled with knowing how a giraffe's life works out until now.
I love Kurt Vonnegut! I follow his quotes account on Twitter and he always has insightful things to say. The quote of his you posted here is especially beautiful. I've never seen it until now.
I agree with you, Ben. Goal setting is so important and it makes the achievement of your goal a fun and insightful experience. In speech and debate, we have to set goals for each tournament and for the long term so we can check on them throughout the year. It's pretty cool to see which ones you achieved and which ones you can work harder on. I hate math more than anything, but we need people who can do it and I'm glad that there is someone out there who has a passion for it! Good luck with everything! We are rooting for you!
I love the line where you describe being guided by the stars. Your story follows a theme while also describing the colors which was really hard to do for me. I like how your last paragraph adds humor with your colors.
On Taylor M.'s, I wrote:
I really resonate with your last memoir. I am an extroverted introvert as well. It is really hard for my friends to understand that even with my talkative and energetic personality, I need time to be alone and be calm.
This is a beautiful prose, Taylor. Your imagery perfectly describes the intensity of your story. I love the line, "when I look at my past self, I see a stranger, reeking with the purity and ignorance of youth." The little bit of humor about Mrs. Paulson lightened up the dark theme. I'm not sure I would miss her, but hey, you do you.
Laura
This puts such a humorous twist on something that isn't humorous in real life. Isn't it funny how we will only provide quality higher education for thousands of dollars in tuition and board and then hundreds for books? I just think the fact that almost everyone attending college has debt for decades says a lot about our educational system. Just a little mini-rant that ties into your story.
I cancelled Donald Trump too! I would be totally okay with more donuts and parking spaces. Preferably more parking spaces next to Hurt's Donut. I literally forget to dry my clothes all the time. I think I'm going to make you in charge of the world...
This almost sounds like you could turn it into a song. It is beautifully written and describes the idea of the need to be free and live life for yourself really well. I like the like "I wasn't made to be caged." This line is so simple, yet it speaks volumes.
On Jordan's, I wrote:
This is a great motivational quote, Jordan. I can apply it to speech and debate, so it is pretty multi-purposeful since you can apply it to sports. I struggle with doubting myself a lot, too, and I know how self-deprecating it is. I think it's important to believe in yourself because you are the only constant in your life.
I totally agree with everything you've said here. Having your hobbies and your job separate can be a good idea because you can do what you love on the side and then focus on professionalism in your career field. I also agree with the idea of balance between dreaming and realism. Dreaming big can be a beautiful thing, but also setting realistic goals is rewarding.
I'm writing a lot here, but I am wanting to be a psychologist or a therapist myself. I've been to therapy, and it is such a wonderful way to express yourself and not have any filters on what you are saying. I don't care what I do in the future, as long as I help people.
Keep doing what you love!
Laura
I like how you incorporated the quote you used earlier into your poem. It is a nice touch and kind of keeps with our theme of "stealing artistically".
I love the imagery here. The line, "the light turns and smoke flies, leaving side by side but later all I see is an ashy speck in the rear view" is really great. The laid back theme of this story reminds me of lazy summer days with my own friends.
I love the imagery here. The line, "the light turns and smoke flies, leaving side by side but later all I see is an ashy speck in the rear view" is really great. The laid back theme of this story reminds me of lazy summer days with my own friends.
I love how you take a color and turn it into a story. I like the imagery with the smoke in the crowd's eyes.
Thanks for taking the time to do this, Laura. I know your classmates' appreciate the feedback.
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